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Drowning, Peacefully
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Literature Text
Help me, I am drowning
In this wayward maelstrom of feelings
More than known dimensions, no ceilings
Full of broken memories past zooming
Changing and melting colors every second
Silhouettes of people I am dearly loving
Images of my short life pushing and shoving
Distances far too incredible to reckon
Pain is flooding my exhausted weak lungs
Concurrently my mind gets blown and lone
Suddenly appears the calm eye of cyclone
Confused I experience the gift of tongues
All the chaos lapsed into a perfect silence
'This I your end, I don't want to pretend
But it is peace into which you will blend'
Finally I drowned – without any violence
In this wayward maelstrom of feelings
More than known dimensions, no ceilings
Full of broken memories past zooming
Changing and melting colors every second
Silhouettes of people I am dearly loving
Images of my short life pushing and shoving
Distances far too incredible to reckon
Pain is flooding my exhausted weak lungs
Concurrently my mind gets blown and lone
Suddenly appears the calm eye of cyclone
Confused I experience the gift of tongues
All the chaos lapsed into a perfect silence
'This I your end, I don't want to pretend
But it is peace into which you will blend'
Finally I drowned – without any violence
German version is available at:
No translation for this one yet, sry.
Generally I write my poems in my native language German, but I always try not only to translate but also to transfer/adapt it.
I would appreciate feedback how appropriate the direct discourse is used and whether you have understood the gift od tongues.
Sry if my latest poems have become a bit drab, I'm afrait not to be very inspired these days
No translation for this one yet, sry.
Generally I write my poems in my native language German, but I always try not only to translate but also to transfer/adapt it.
I would appreciate feedback how appropriate the direct discourse is used and whether you have understood the gift od tongues.
Sry if my latest poems have become a bit drab, I'm afrait not to be very inspired these days
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It sounds good to me. It has an eerie sense to it and dark overtones. Its good. You have a great writing style. The directness adds to the characters voice so it works. It is a beautiful piece of work. Well done.^^